I begin the story, let me explain a little about Zach. Zach is 18 years old. He was 5’ 11” and weighed 175 pounds (most of that was muscle, seeing as he was a offensive lineman for his varsity football team). Zach had kind of longer, shaggy blonde hair that curled above his ears and went around his head. When it comes to penis length, Zach wasn’t a “massive” kid. He was a little above average, with a nice 7 ½ penis. Zach was very comfortable with his size.
Now Zach isn’t a virgin; he’s had sex before, three times to be exact, but he hadn’t had sex in a while. One day on the couch, after school, Zach started masturbating. To get it up, he started thinking of some fantasies. He thought of his ex, Mary, whom he’s fucked before, but not in a while. He tried experimenting with thoughts of teachers, nurses, but nothing seemed to work anymore. All the sudden, Zach’s mom came home early from work. Badly startled, Zach rolled off the couch, laid on the ground, and pretended like he’d dropped something underneath the couch, while he discreetly zipped up his pants. How did he not hear her? There was no car pulling in or door shutting. Maybe he hadn’t heard it over the heat of the moment.
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The nervousness of being seen by his mom caused his erection to dissipate in the process. His mom gave him a weird look, “What are you doing Zach?” his mother asked.
“Oh I just dropped my pencil under the couch… I, uh, rolled over to get it when you came in… Heh, I kinda fell off the couch rather than rolled off. ” Zach quickly retorted, hoping his lie would get him out of this jam.
“Um, ok I guess…” Zach’s mom replied. To her, it kind of sounded like Zach was lying, but what had he been doing. Her first thought had been that he was masturbating, being that he was an average 18-year-old boy, but figured that he wasn’t seeing as he would probably have done that in his room.
His mom turned to hang up her coat on the coat hanger and put her keys on the key holder. She turned on her heal and started walking into the kitchen to make dinner. Zach looked at his mom. She was about 5’ 6”, 110 pounds, and very tan. Her name was Julia. Julia was very pretty, especially in her late 40’s. She had 36 D breasts and knew how to flaunt them just right. Julia was a secretary, so she was wearing a nice jacket and skirt and had her mid-length hair tied up in a bun when she came home.
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When Julia’s hair was let down, the blonde silk fell down mid-way on her back.
“Did dad’s flight leave on time this morning?” Zach called out as he walked to the bathroom.
“Yes, it did. After I make dinner, I’m going to Laurie’s (family friend) house to pick up some of her clothes that she’s outgrown. She’s put on a couple pounds since Jim (Laurie’s husband) died…”
“Ya, I understand. ” Zach replied.
Zach took off his clothes and got in the shower to wash off the dirt and sweat from football practice. He got in and noticed that the hot water had caused his penis to semi-inflate. He started tugging on it and soon it was at full mast. He was slowly stroking it, once again trying to think of something to masturbate about. All the sudden, Zach thought of his mom walking into the kitchen; how her breasts slowly bobbed up and down as she walked. Zach felt his penis get harder, just like before he comes. He started vigorously jerking off, thinking about his tan skinned, blonde haired mom.
After about three minutes of the wonderful fantasy, Zach felt that familiar tingling sensation on the inside of his body, between his penis and his butt. He slowed down his stroking and watched as ropes of cum came out of the purple head of his cock.
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Then Zach stood there, washed all the cum off, and proceeded to actually take a shower. After shampooing his hair, Zach’s mom yelled out that dinner needed to be heated for six more minutes and that she was leaving for Laurie’s house and that she’d be back around 9:00 PM.
“Ok mom, I’ll see ya around 9. ” Zach yelled over the sound of the water. After about 30 seconds, Zach heard the front door shut. Zach turned off the water, dried off, and decided to walk through the house naked. He walked out of the bathroom and turned right to go through the living room and go up the stairs to his room. About five feet from the base of the stairs, the front door opened up and Julia walked right in, only to find her son butt-naked with an extremely surprised expression on his face.
“Wha-wha-what are you DOING?!” Julia cried as she covered her eyes and turned away.
Zach bolted back to the bathroom and slammed the door. After a few seconds on leaning his back against the bathroom door, Zach replied, “I didn’t have any clothes, so I was walking upstairs to get some. You just walked in at an awkward time!”
“Ok, whatever, forget about it Zach. Pretend nothin happened. I just needed to get my purse. ”
Zach heard his mom walk into the kitchen, stall for a couple seconds, turn around and go back to the door.
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“Ok, I’m leavin for good now…” Julia loudly commented, and then walked out the door.
After about two minutes of waiting, Zach walked out of the bathroom and ran to the base of the stairs. He climbed, two stairs at a time, up the flight until he got to the little hall. Zach walked in his room and proceeded to get dressed into a pair of Wilson lounge pants and a lineman camp shirt. He walked back down stairs, sat on the couch, and proceeded to turn on the ‘tube. He flipped to ESPN and started watching for the NFL scores.
About an hour later, Zach heard a beeping sound coming from the kitchen. He also started noticing a smoky, cheesy smell coming from the kitchen. When he looked over, dark gray smoke was coming from the kitchen. Zach jumped up and ran into the kitchen, only to find the food his mom had prepared on fire in the frying pan. He quickly ran to the opposite wall and grabbed the small fire extinguisher that was mounted there for emergencies. Zach pulled the pin and ripped on the trigger as white foam shot all over the fire and dowsed the burning. He then turned off the oven, but the knob was too hot to turn and was semi-melted to the rest of the oven. Zach grabbed an oven mitt and forced the knob to the OFF setting.
Zach’s mind was racing.
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There was a little smoke stains on the ceiling and the rest of the house looked a little hazy. He picked up his cell phone to call his mom and tell her about the emergency, but for some reason, an automated operator told him that the number he was calling couldn’t be reached. Zach redialed the number and tried again. The same thing happened. Zach then decided to call Laurie’s house.
*Ring Ring*
“Hello?” A coarse voice asked on the line.
“Hi, um, this is Zach Taylor. I was wondering if I could speak to my mom. There’s been an emergency at our house…” Zach calmly said into mouthpiece.
“I haven’t seen Julia in two weeks Zach. I don’t know where she is? Why, are you ok?”
“Oh ya Ms. Stevens, I’m fine, it’s just that I need to get in touch with my mom and she said that she was going to your house tonight. ”
“Nope, your mom isn’t here. And she’s not coming over either…”
“Um, ok, I’ll try her cell phone again. ”
The two exchanged goodbyes and hung up.
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Zach wondered where his mom could be. He tried her cell phone once more. This time, however, it rang once, twice, three times and then went into her voicemail. Zach decided to do a GPS location on her phone, seeing as the two phones were bough in a package and can locate one another. The coordinates were read off to him and a small map was shown on the cell phone screen. A red dot indicated him and a blue dot indicated his mom’s cell phone. Zach decided to get in his car and find his mom.
The GPS map led Zach to a small one-story brick house in a nice little cul-de-sac neighborhood. He pulled up in the driveway. Zach had never seen this house before, nor did he see his mom’s car in the driveway. Maybe it was a weird coincidence that another Laurie had been the subject of his mother’s whereabouts. Zach went up to the door and knocked.
*Knock Knock*
About a minute later, a middle-aged man came to the door. He had a pair of Nike sport shorts on and no shirt. For his old age, the man had a muscular body.
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“Uh, I’m looking for… never mind. Wrong house” Zach trailed off, almost surprised by his lack-of asking where his mom was. Zach tried his best not to show his surprise.
“Alright son, have a good day. ” The man responded
“Um, you too sir. ” Zach said and turned to walk back to his car.
The man shut the door and walked back inside. Was it just a glitch that the GPS had led him here? If so, where was his mom? Zach decided to walk around the house and see if there was any opened windows or anything that he could hear.
Zach waited in his car for about five minutes before getting back out. He walked around to the side of the house and found a small metal fence blocking him. In one motion, Zach put his hand on the fence and turned his body side-ways in midair to leap over the fence. He walked around the back of the house and found a half-way-opened window in the back. Zach couldn’t quite hear what was going on in through the window, but he knew he could hear something.
Zach looked around for something to stand on. He found a defenseless plastic white chair sitting there.
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Zach walked over to it, lifted it up, and took it back to the window, where he proceeded in standing on it.
What he heard next amazed him.
“Oh ya, you like that don’t you dirty bitch!” a man’s voice said provocatively
“Oh yes, yes, yes! I love it! Shove that hard cock in my wet pussy!” a women’s voice replied.
Along with all this dirty talk that Zach couldn’t believe he was hearing, there was a constant, loud smacking sound. “Oh my God,” Zach thought. “I think that man is having sex with my mom!”
Zach put his hands on the window ledge and tried to hoist himself up. His eyes barely got over the top of the ledge, but it was enough to see what was going on. Sure enough, his mom was laying spread-eagle on the bed and was getting pounded by the man that had come to the door.
“Oh baby, I’m gonna fucking COME!” Julia yelled out as she was rocked back and forth on the bed.
All the sudden, Zach’s mom wrapped her legs around the man’s back and started shaking.
“Oh ya! Feel good Jules? I’m gonna drop my load any second now!” the man responded as his audible breathing increased.
“I want it in my mouth Kenny! Please come in my mouth!”
At that, the man pulled out of Zach’s mom. In an almost choreographed way, Zach’s mom rolled to the right as the man quickly laid down where his mom was at. Julia got to her knees, straddled the man’s legs, and lowered her head onto the man’s penis and began to use her head to finish him off.
Zach couldn’t stand for this anymore.
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He jumped off the chair and ran around to the front of the house. He put his hand on the doorknob and turned it, hoping that it’d be open. Man, what he would show this guy if the door was open. Amazingly, the knob easily turned, allowing Zach to enter this domicile.
Zach followed the little ways back to the room, where he stared at the door and heard the grunts and groans of the acts of betrayal happening on the other side of the door. Zach lifted up his leg, bent his knee, and kicked the door right at the handle. The door flew open and Zach paced through the doorway. What he saw was the half angry, half surprised look of the man and the horrified expression of his mom.
At seeing this, Zach lose control. He ran at the man and picked him up by the shoulders and neck. The man started to regain his thought process and began fighting back, but was no match for Zach tuned athletic body. Zach did just as he was taught in football and bent his knees, cocked his arms back, and delivered a blow to the middle of the man’s chest, sending the mystery man sprawling backwards onto the bed. Zach quickly got on top of the man and began to punch the man in the face. After about five punches, Zach heard a crack and stopped. He looked at the man’s beated face.
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The man’s nose was bent in a way it shouldn’t be. The eyes were already beginning to swell, and it appeared the man had been knocked out. Zach turned and stood up. In the time the struggle had taken place, Zach’s mom had already put on clothes and was looking humiliated. She walked over to Zach and grabbed him by the arm. Zach made a whip-like motion with his arm in an attempt to get his mother’s sluttish hand off of him.
“What the FUCK are you doing mom?!” Zach yelled as he faced his mom.
“It wasn’t… It’s just… You don’t get… Please Zach, let’s just go home. We can talk about it later!” Julia cried.
“Yer a whore ‘ma, you really are!”
“Please Zach! I’m so…sorry!” Julia was cut short by the tears.
Seeing his mother cry always made Zach sad himself. He calmed down a little.
“We’re going home. You can explain this one to dad yer self!” Zach said as he led his mom out of the house and to the passenger seat of his car. Zach slammed the door and walked around the front of the Grand Am to the driver’s seat and got in.
The two had a long, silent trip back to the house.
“Where’s your car?” Zach asked as they pulled into their driveway.
“I left it at work… I rode the bus home and to Kenny’s house…” Julia softly said, not looking up from her starring spot on the floor of the car.
Zach turned off the car, got out, and walked back up to the house. He heard his passenger come out of the car as he was going inside the house.
As soon as his mom got inside and shut the door, she turned to Zach (who was waiting in the living room) and pleaded with him to not tell his father.
“Why shouldn’t I? You cheated on him while he was away for WORK! How dare you!” Zach yelled.
“Please Zach… Please don’t tell him…” His mother repeated.
Looking at his mom, with her shirt loosely buttoned up and her skirt half-way zipped up in the back, Zach started to think about if the sex with his mom was good? He slapped himself in the mind for that. How, at a time like this, could he think of incest with his mom; fantasizing about his mother and having sex with her. But the idea kind of turned Zach on, and he felt that familiar hardening sensation between his legs. All the sudden, a thought popped in his head, something that could fulfill his incest fantasies with his mom.
“Well what are you going to do for ME?” Zach replied
“You’ll never have to do chores EVER again. And, uh, I’ll give you gas money for the rest of the school year! Please Zach…”
“I got an idea! Take off your clothes!” Zach ordered
“What?! Are you crazy? I’m not taking off my clothes, you horny little bastard!”
“Take them off or dad’ll get a call later and I don’t think he’ll like it much!”
“Why you little… Fine, if that’s what you want, I’ll do it. ”
“Actually, you need to take a shower first.
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Go ahead, go take a shower. You won’t need to get any clean clothes though. Just go as you are and come out naked!”
At that, Zach’s mom gave him a dirty look and quickly walked into the bathroom, where Zach heard the water start running and the sound of a shower. Zach couldn’t believe this was happening. He had never thought of his mom like this before, and already his plans to fuck her were coming together nicely. He sat and waited for his mom to finish, which wasn’t that long.
Zach’s mom walked out of the bathroom, fully nude and definetly humiliated. She looked up at Zach.
“Happy now? Can I put my clothes back on so I don’t have to stand naked in front of my son?” Julia asked.
“Ummm, no, I don’t think so. ” Zach calmly replied. “Actually, come over here, I want to show you something.
Zach’s mom gulped and walked over to him. Zach was standing next to the side of the couch. He grabbed his mom by the shoulders and made her face the couch.
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Then he grabbed her hips and pulled them backward. She tried to move her upper body too, but Zach grabbed her hands and planted them on the sofa. Zach then did what he never thought he’d be able to do.
Zach got down on his knees and stuck his tongue in his mom’s hole. He began wildly thrashing his tongue and licking up and down. At the first lick, Julia had jumped in surprise. She began to plead with Zach to stop, but at the same time her breathing increased and she started involuntarily pushing back onto Zach’s face.
Zach had saved the best for last and began going wild on his mom’s clit. He licked it up and down, left and right, circled around it, and went ever direction over it. He sucked on it a little and even nibbled a little. After a few minutes of this, Zach’s mom announced she was nearing climax. This only aroused Zach more, in which he pushed his face hard into Julia’s vagina and began licking for all his worth. Julia’s insides started spasming wildly.
“Oh my fucking God Zach! I’m fucking coming! Ohhhh, it feels soo good!” Julia screamed out as her son led her to multiple orgasms. For a couple of minutes, Zach’s mom shook with pleasure as Zach slowed his licking down and did the occasional touch of the tongue.
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Zach stood up and turned his mom around. She looked a little out of it, but she also had in mind what was going to happen next.
Zach led his mom over to the couch, in which he sat down. He lowered his mom to her knees. He let her go on autopilot. She reached into his pants and fished out his dick. Julia then pulled the pants down to Zach’s ankles and began to give Zach a hand job, hoping that she wouldn’t have to do what she knew Zach was going to make her do. Zach nodded his head and put his hand on the back of his mom’s head. With over-powering strength, he pushed her mouth all the way down his dick. His mom began gagging and he let go. She quickly pulled up off the dick.
“I kinda liked that Zach… This is so wrong, but you’re turning me on so bad!” Julia said in almost a moan.
“It feels soo good mom! I loved it when I forced you to deep throat it. ” Zach said back with pride.
“Do it for me again.
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Just go a little slower. ”
Zach did as he was told and slowly pushed his mom’s head all the way down his dick, where he held it. His mom slowly began to bob her head at the base of his dick. It felt so good for Zach. He began to slowly move his dick in and out of his mom’s head/throat. Zach accidentally took his hand of the back of her head, but surprisingly she kept going by herself. About five minutes later, it was Zach’s turn to announce that he was going to come. Zach stood up and his mom backed up, staying on her knees.
“Come in my mouth Zach! Put it all right here!” Julia said as she opened up her mouth and flicked her tongue out.
“Ohhhh I’m comminnnggg!!!” Zach moaned as he shot a couple ropes of cum onto his mom. One stretched from the top left of her forehead down to her left nostril and the other went from the top of her nose to the bottom of her chin and into her mouth.
The rest gobbed out into her mouth and on her tongue. Zach’s mom then did the unthinkable and swallowed all of the cum in her mouth.
“I never imagined that we would ever do the things that we just did…” Zach replied as he looked back on everything that had taken place that day after school.
“I know.
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I found out that I not only love my son, but that I’m IN love with him…” Zach’s mom said.
Zach’s mom wiped off the rest of the cum from her face and casually smeared it on the bottom of the couch. Zach then took off the rest of his pants, threw them aside, and laid down on the couch. His mom lay down in front of him and they watched TV for a while. All the sudden, Julia grabs the remote and starts hitting buttons. A porn channel pops up and a scene of a graphic porno flashes on the screen. It’d been about 20 minutes after the mother and son’s run, and Zach’s dick was ready for more. Zach’s penis, which had been laying limp against his mom’s lower back, started to slowly inflate. Julia giggled and turned her head to Zach, “Ready for another round kiddo?”
“You bet yer ass I do! I wanna go all the way this time though!” Zach said. With that, Zach moved a couple inches down behind his mom, still laying down, and wrapped his arm around her stomach. She instinctlivly parted her legs alittle and Zach used his free hand to push the head of dick against the opening of her vagina. His mom took a breath in, and Zach plunged his dick hard into his mother’s wanting love hole. He slowly backed ¾ the way out and then plunged back in, sending pleasure waves up both of their bodies. Zach did this over and over again, making the precious natural lubricant of his mom make a spot on his leg and the sofa.
Zach began to quicken his pace.
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He pulled his mother close and, using his left arm wrapped around her stomach, massaged her breasts, alternating between the two. He softly pinched the nipples and rolled them around his fingers. He cupped the breast and then softly squeezed them, being a self-proclaimed expert on feeling breasts. Zach then tried something new and reached his breast-feeling hand down south to his mother’s missing bush. He softly rubbed the bare area and then began to rub her clit with his index finger. Julia gasped out and her breathing started to increase and the minutes wore on.
“Let’s do some different positions baby. ” Zach’s mom said.
“Sounds good to me!” Zach chirped back.
They both stood up and walked over to where they were again. Julia got back into her leaning stance on the side of the couch and Zach positioned himself behind his mom. He placed his purple penis helmet at the entrance of her pussy. Instead of thrusting in, Zach grabbed his mom’s hips and violently pulled them toward him. He went balls-deep into her. Zach then backed out all the way, pushed on his mom’s pussy lips with the tip of his dick, then pushed his way back in and began to fuck like a rabbit.
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He was fucking so fast he got dizzy from lack of blood to the brain. He slowed down and he noticed that his mother’s breathing began to slow down also.
This time, Zach led the position change and let his mom be in control. Zach popped his dick out of his mom and walked over to the couch, only to lay down. His mom got the hint and walked over. She straddled his legs, then slowly got to the normal position, hovering over Zach’s cock. In that instant, Zach blurted out, “I should get a condom! I don’t wanna knock you up!”
“It’s ok, I’m on the pill. Any more objections?” Julia replied as she chuckled.
“O…. k. ” Zach said as he didn’t wait for his mom to lower herself onto his impaling rod. He thrust upward quickly and entered her. He then slowly lowered his bottom back to the sofa as his mom’s pussy followed, filled up with his meat. She then began to bob her tanned-ass up and down on his pole. Zach could never bring himself to look the girl in the eyes as he was doing this.
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He almost always began to laugh. His mom secretly felt the same way, so she leaned forward, Julia’s breasts smushing against Zach’s chest, and put her chin on the nape of his neck. She softly sucked and licked an area of his neck as Zach put a butt cheek in each hand and began to squeeze them, helping his mom move up and down on his cock. After a while, Zach’s mom sat up.
“I want to try something new with you Zach. I’m pretty sure it’s new for you too. Um, I’ll be right back…” Julia trailed off as she pulled off of Zach’s warm cock and walked upstairs.
Zach laid back and crossed his arms behind his head, looking at the ceiling smiling. This was the best. He go to fuck a beautiful women, whom he loved, and he didn’t have to worry about getting caught or getting her knocked up.
A few moments later, his mom comes bounding down the stairs carrying items in her hand. She walks over in front of the sofa and shows them to Zach.
“A condom and some lube… What are these for? I thought I didn’t need a condom mom!” Zach said as he thought she was lying to him before.
“Just do as your told, dirty boy, and we’ll have a fun time!” Julia responded slyly.
Julia ripped open the condom package and pulled out the rolled-up O.
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She unraveled it over Zach’s cock, which snuggly fit into the raincoat. She then put lube all over the condom, thoroughly covering it. Then she resumed her position before, straddling his legs and hovering just above his cock. This time, however, she leaned back a little and positioned the end of Zach’s rocket at a different port on her body.
Before Zach could say anything, his mom slowly sat down on his cock, sending his hard penis into her butt. Julia gasped out in ecstasy. It wasn’t a pain, really. For her, it tickled the wall between her anus and her vagina canal. Getting penetrated like that also didn’t really hurt her; it was more of an awkward feeling. She felt like she had to use the bathroom.
Zach had realized what happened but didn’t do anything but stare at the pleasure hole he was now in. He watched has his mother bounced up and down, her rectum making his condom-covered penis disappear over and over again. Zach also noticed that, as they went on, his mom’s ass got looser and looser. After popping out his dick once on accident, Zach realized that his mom’s insides were clean. He pulled off the condom and grinned at his mom.
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She picked up on his idea and reached for the bottle of lube that was on the coffee table. She squirted some on her hand and rubbed it on her ass hole and on her son’s dick. Zach then repositioned and rammed his hard cock back into his mom’s butt. She gasped our as Zach also shoved three fingers into her pussy. Zach pulled them in and out, hitting her G-spot every time he went in. Zach was also rubbing her clit with this thumb. After a while of the combined orfice-assualt, Julia came all over Zach’s hands and stomach. Zach wasn’t one hundred percent sure of what he just witnessed, but he liked the clover-like smell of the liquid and licked some off his hand. It was sweet yet tangy.
Zach then gave his mom the signal to get off of him. They stood up and Zach ran to the bathroom to get a towel. He didn’t want to make a mess, more than he already did, and have to clean up more. He laid the towel over the sofa.
“Mom, get on your hands and knees. I wanna fuck yer ass doggy style.
” Zach said to his mom
“Ok baby. ” His mother quickly agreed.
Julia got up on the bed and raised her ass into the air. Zach awkwardly positioned himself behind her. This time he didn’t line up the head to the hole. He wanted his mother’s ass, and he wanted it NOW. Zach quickly shoved his cock into his mom’s ass and pulled it out. He didn’t give the rectum time to stretch out, so his mom was in a little pain, but the pleasure that came with the violent penetration was overpowering. Zach rammed his mom’s ass over and over again, finally reaching the climax.
“Mom, I’m gonna come again!” Zach half moaned, half mumbled.
“Do it on my ass baby! Come on my ass, just like on the porno!” His mom said eagerly back. Zach pulled his dick out of his mom and shot one small rope of cum and a couple gobs onto his mom’s ass and lower back. She reached back and yanked on his dick a couple times. “Man, this was just like a fuck’n porno!” Zach thought.
Half an hour later, Zach and his mother Julia had taken a shower together and were laying, clean, on the sofa, watching a movie.
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As the movie ended, Zach said, “ Mom, are we gonna keep doing this stuff after today?”
“Well I hope we can hun. If we get caught though, it’ll be so humiliating. If we get caught by your father, he’ll probably divorce me and disown you. I love you so much though baby. The risk is worth it. We can do it whenever we have some time to ourselves or your dad goes on a trip. ”
“Well isn’t dad going to Guatemala for two weeks when he gets back?”
“Yes he is Zach. Yes he is…”
This was the first sex story that I’ve written. I’ll take praise and criticism. Tell me what I need to do to make the story better, if you think it can be any better J.